Eamon: March 2018

Wednesday, March 14, 2018

Pupil	Success Criteria Explanation Writing	Partner
	I have used a general statement to introduce the topic.
	My writing explains how one thing leads to another.
	I have used the present tense
	I have written in time order (When…First…Then…After…Finally)
	I have used causal connectives ( So…If…This causes…This makes…therefore …)
	I have written in third person (I haven’t used the word ‘YOU’)
What I am proud of in my writing today: that i've done my best and did the most writing i could and explained the most i could.
What I can do to improve my writing next time: try to use les of the word you because i want to wright a good third person story!!

how to use the time traveller 2000,000!!

welcome to the time traveller 200,000 im going to show the user how to use this time machine yes i know the user probably knows how to use it but i’m going to show the user all the other cool features that this time machine has like safety and also dangerous things that could happen.

time traveller how to.

SAFETY: never use if the user is using an electronic device, unless its a camera if using any other device, that device will interfere with the wires and cables inside the time traveller 200,000. 2: if under 11 do not use because children under the age of 11 are probably silly and will mess everything up.

DANGER: The user must make sure they have the right date and time for where the user wants to go or the user will end up someplace completely different and maybe dangerous if they are not careful.

LAST TOUCHES: This is how the user uses The Time Traveler 200000 All the user needs to do is sit inside then enjoy the ride.